Oil on Canvas 50x70cm
I like it a lot. I think the hill reads a little flat because the horizon line doesn't really desaturate compared to the closer areas. I kind of like that personally bc the yellow you used is strong and pleasing and gentle. But if you wanted to technically give it more depth, desaturate the hill horizon.
I think her shoe is too glossy in comparison to the next brightest highlights so it's kind of where your eyes go.
I also think the man's leg behind his head (the black blob on his shoulder) makes his head shape hard to read and that you may want to just crop his leg out so it's obscured by his body and not next to his head.
I thought his shoe was a ponytail until I read this comment š I agree that it should either be moved, or it needs some sort of highlight/contrast to be differentiated from the hair.
agree with everything here. In addition, I feel like the piece could benefit from having the guy in the front be even closer, as to add more sense of depth you know?
I stand by this comment!
Beautiful! I love the figures and the relaxing scenery. You may consider a bit more gradient in the landscape to add atmospheric perspective, and really push the horizon into the distance
And a tiny bit more detail closer to the viewer in the grass n stuff.
It's brilliant. I absolutely love the brushwork here, especially on the figures.
To find critique points however, there are a few things that my brain can't quite make sense of - particularly the hands? of the figure on the right. If that's their hand on the floor then I think it needs a bit more work to announce the shape of it, and if it isn't, then whatever it is should change in tone a little so as not to be so close to the skin tones you have used. Perhaps a little more distinction in the arms would help out as well. I also agree that the highlights on the shoes are a little distracting.
Otherwise, I think you've done a great job with the lighting, and your choice of colours is coherent and nice to look at.
Reminds me of the Wyeth paintings and that's a big compliment from me.
Funny because I used a still from the terrence malick movie Days of Heaven as a reference. The cinematography was heavily inspired by Wyeth
That's so cool! I didn't know that!
First thing I thought of as well!
You forgot to put the phones in their handsā¦. Irony
This is beautiful! Your brushwork is lovely! Knit-picking, Iād say you could soften her facial features a bit so theyāre not quite as jarring. You could also just look at shifting the left figureās head or left leg slightly or shifting the values so they donāt merge together. Itās such a relaxing, beautiful piece tho and the sky is superb
Lovely honestly, the depth of beauty is nice
Her eyelashes are crazy, background could have some more detail
Still way better than anything I could do, 8/10
Love the mood, the colors, and the comforting setting. One thing that caught my eye was does that man have a ponytail? Or is that his knee? If so maybe add some lighting with little streaks of hair. Or change the values to make the knee lighter. Other than that love this style. āŗļø
Great comp. Great figures. Overall this is the standard for good work.
Is that Han Solo? I really like your art!
Breathtaking! Thank you so much for sharing with us!
Love it, I'm not an artist like this so I don't know where to give you feedback but wow it looks great imo
Love the mood of the foreground, really draws you in. The background could do with being a litttle busier to divert the eye and provide some contrast imo. Otherwise, a really lovely piece. Nicely done.
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Edit: A couple of words.
Lovely
I think it's beautiful. But I feel the background falls a little flat. Maybe add some tree in the mid ground, or make some hills more pronounced.
It's really beautiful as is though. Keep up the great work!!
The aesthetic is really nice and I think you did an impressive job capturing the tones of twilight! I think although the dim lighting is realistic, because the woman has such dark clothes, it is a little more difficult to focus on her so maybe she could use more highlight? Also maybe adding some more vertical strokes to the grassland, because itās kind of flattened by the horizontal brush strokes. But thatās just my take! Overall, really strong work!
looks good is the elbow really cut off at the bottom or thatās just the photo my first take on critique is having the elbow cut off just there is not the greatest for the composition. my other critique is the sky looks flat due to the relative same blues in what should be both far and near. Horizon line is the farthest point of sky and should be lighter than sky above, which of course is closer. Overall looks excellent keep at it. Canāt wait for the next one.šš¤©
OMG this gorgeous !!!
beautiful!!
First, your figures are done very well.
Composition; the man's arm falls of the canvas. Space below the figures would balance elements better.
Value; be specific with your light source; highlights-midtones-shadows. Work the whole value scale 1 - 9. Even with an overcast sky you would have higher highlights and midtones ... not sure if the horizon is a distant sunset or simply clouds. Your figures look like they are placed in an ambient lighted room, not outside.
This is an old video from my mentor from years ago. I use a more abbreviated palette to his and not his complete breakdown. This is how he solved the value issue with pigment. We all have seen the value scale in black and white ... color is harder.
I took a workshop with him decades ago. To arrive at the graduated value scale of pigment place a dollop of paint on your palette. Use a palette knife to cut that amount in half, and move that beside the first; then add the same amount of white. It doesn't have to be exact; just in general. When you've mixed the second, wipe your palette knife clean and cut the second dollop in half, then move it beside it and mix the same amount of white ... continue until you have your "value scale." I never did all 6-9 values, thereafter ... maybe three.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HqIalXf6ELM&ab_channel=Jerry%27sArtaramaArtSupplies
I am immediately enthralled by the person on the right. Drew me in hard! šš
I think the sky is too bold and saturated and takes attention away from the figures.
I'd like to see more texture in the grass in the foreground.
I'd soften the edge of the horizon a bit more.
I think itās great, but Iām struggling to understand the lighting.
I see a shadow cast behind the man on the left, but the womanās face feels illuminated. It looks like sunrise or sunset, but the horizon feels really flat.
Otherwise I love the composition and the casualness of their poses.
Yeah it's a sunset. The woman might be a bit to bright
Does the guy have a ponytail? Or is that his leg? My brain is trying to figure it out
I absolutely love this movie.
Definitely. I grabbed a dozen stills from it a couple weeks back. Considering doing more oil paintings with them as reference
Terrence Malick was inspired by the paintings of Edward Hopper and Andrew Wyeth for this film. Good job š
I like the composition in this painting. It begs you to enter the scene, see what the two girls are doing. The broad swipe of color are carefully placed to create the images. One thing I would work on is the background. Thereās too much yellow field against the figure of the girl on the right, and looks as if it might have been painted after the girl was painted. Itās a tad awkward. But all in all I like it.
I really like this!
Something about the horizon line feels like it's lacking lustre/life but I'm not sure what it is.
Great work!
its fine
Beautiful, love it! Should his back be darker?
For me, the female figure is a little difficult to discern - I'm not sure where the arms and legs are and the hand looks like it might be a shoe at first glance. I'd agree with other comments that her actual shoe is too high in value, so that it draws the eye there instead of to her face. Her ear is a little on the thick side, and looks a little bit like an eye - it's also quite high on her head. The distance is a little ragged - I'm not sure where the hills end and the clouds start.
Because you have used the same amount of detail for the midground and distance, it loses some depth. It also loses some depth because you have used a warm colour nearly all the way to the horizon whereas it should have got a little colder in tone and a little hazier. Their background (the field) is not consistent; in between them, there are short dashing brushstrokes of a light brownish colour, but dark green patches to the woman's right and this area is also in a colder colour.
The man's knee is too high so that, until I looked closer, I thought he had a ponytail. This can be easily rectified by defining the side of the man's head on the left. Lastly, there is shadow all around them, as though they were under the shade of a tree, instead of a shadow cast by their bodies. This muddles them in with their surroundings a bit, so they lose some of their impact as the subject.
Thanks for the feedback. These points seem to be coming up in most people critiques so I think I will have to revise a bit. Might do it today. Thanks again
Is she holding a potato or a cell phone or a rock?
I think thatās her foot?
Amazing work.
I like it. Line between the grass/sky is a bit flat. But otherwise I have no complaints.
Nice!
Found the still from the movie and youāve done a wonderful job. Personally I would highlight the sky, so it illuminates more, like the original. š”
looks fantastic! i would consider brightening up your colors in the sky and towards the front of the grass. a stronger background would really elevate the scene. create more shadows towards the ābackā of the grass, to give the hill more dimension.
Good composition, however, the woman's head is in the golden mean, not the shoe. The clouds need to be softens by stippling not stroking. Stroking makes them look like the hills. The far pasture need to recede more into the back by using a more sfumato technique. This is done by blending and more fog like toward the horizon or the hills. Blues recede and Red's make objects come forward in the composition.
I really like the subject and composition is good. The figures are well done also.
Soften or blend the horizon line but I love this piece !
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