Ahhh TY! The updated version that's incorporated 90% of these suggestions is here https://drive.google.com/file/d/1JBKAF17AFPsMK8CEkt5odSeMzeTuvMIk/view?usp=drivesdk

Use assets from Droid Cartographer and TC Modern and ADayat!

I can't justify a commission. But i am tempted to tinker with learning pixel art. The barrier to entry seems lower.

I kept the ship! Link updated.

I managed to keep it in! i honestly think it looks great. You can't miss it. Link updated.

Link updated.

i tinkered with the description layout, and went for a dark grey so the contrast is a bit easier on the eye.

Basically i listened to what you said. TY!

Biggest change is "supplement" in the title. PC sheet will be done next week.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1JBKAF17AFPsMK8CEkt5odSeMzeTuvMIk/view?usp=sharing v2.8.

Most up to date version. Armour not changed, almost everything else implemented.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1JBKAF17AFPsMK8CEkt5odSeMzeTuvMIk/view?usp=sharing

I've edited and addressed most of your points.

Armour - design choice. Originally I wanted just 2 sets, Juggernaut and VDS. I added a crap middle ground.

Stim pack AP added. Great advice.

Examples given for talent / feat use. Hopefully it's clearer.

Retired at +/- 5 removed.

Limited addressed.... I added (key word limited).

I'll not post AGAIN as I'm verging on spamming the group, but I'll send you the link to the latest version later today.

Thank you my dude!

1. Fail forward with advantage? Given that an extra d20 is roughly the equivalent of a +4, it makes it hard to fail a check if you have double advantage. I'm not sure where it says this.

2. It's not listed as anything precise - it's not that sort of game like PF2e.

3. Shame, I changed it!

4. Silly, some narrative limitations on kit carriage. Same for medical pouch.

It was meant to be an old film style effect.

It's removed in the updated version.

Wow my dude, thank you for the kind words!

There's another post with it at v2.5, which has fixed lots of grammar areas, and changed the cover art.

I haven't addressed your points though - I will do so over the weekend.

FYI, it's currently on 2.7!

Some clarity here (I will add these to the rules).

I'll address the stat piece. I'll likely just remove the retire piece.

I'll review and tweak the armour. The light armour is meant to be a crap halfway house! It's all about the VDS or Juggernaut plate. That's a design choice, but I'll review.

The talents - yes they stack. So a player with close and kill could move 3 squares attack and kill an enemy, repeat for the 2nd action, spend an AP and do so again. This clearly depends on the combat situation, but the "chained" idea was there.

Great point with the stim pack! Defo incorporating that.

TY for the feedback!

I'm actually on v2.7 now. Lots "fixed" in terms of grammar and errors, though I'm sure there are still some there. There's another post at 2.5.

1, 2, 3, 5, 6, 7, 9 largely addressed. And I changed the cover.

What's most interesting is it sounds like you like the premise! I did actually change this to a "supplement / hack" rather than a TTRPG. It's more accurate. However, you are making me consider writing more hahaha. When I used to run this setting a lot of it was on the fly, and it fitted well. That obviously doesn't help a prospective player / GM. And I didn't actually need any other tools if I'm honest.

I could easily shift the theme to ACTUALLY revolve around a Space Wizard(s).

13 is solid advice, and easy to implement.

It's been updated and thanks to the feedback on here is in a much better place. There's actually a version AHEAD of the one I've reposted!

Haha who else?!

Ahhh TY my dude

AMATSU does post apocalyptic as well. If you can find Droid Cartographers video on building maps, it's well worth a watch. The quality he produces with his use of lighting is insane. He chats as he builds and it's super useful.

Most of these are Patreon subscriptions. A Day At, Droid Cartographer, TC Modern.

That level of detailed feedback is incredible, thank you!

I've just gone through and incorporated 95% of it. I had already updated and put up a newer version that had fixed some of this, but doesn't incorporate these edits. You'll be pleased to hear i changed the cover art already.

A huge TY!

hahaha thank you. The same artist as the other pieces (Raymond, credited in the book).

I still miss my little spaceship..... it will have a special place in my heart.

I've never heard of a "manosphere" and never want to again!

Not a good sign in a relationship.

I made a new post with a link to the new file that's been edited to include most suggestions.

I did change the picture.....

I did change the title format. I was going for a "They came from outer space!" Old timey look. It obviously didn't work. I do prefer the new style though.

Thanks for the feedback!

I loved my cover. I've stuck a new post up that has ALL the revisions I felt were worthwhile (which was 90% of them).

I changed the cover. I also changed the style of the title based on your feedback. I tried that font but it really didn't fit. However, I do think you'll prefer the style of the new title font and layout.

Thanks again.

TY for the feedback.

I feel there is already so much other content out there for random generation of systems, adventures etc that I can add very little there. I suppose that makes this a character generation supplement.... That is loosely tied to a setting.

Getting to this level was already a push. Although not "professional grade" I do feel it's consistent throughout in style and format. And that's good enough for me.

Really kind words to say you'd give this a convention spin, TY.