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Tbh I think it needs work. Here's my two cents:
I think you could work on the flow and sentence structure as it reads very stilted and doesn't come across as particuarly lyrical. I don't know much about lyrical writing but if that's what you're aiming for, I'd suggest finding examples you want to emulate and picking them apart to figure out what makes good lyrical writing and why it works.
I also dont think it's the strongest opener for a story because you're giving a lot of exposition about the setting before you're getting the audience hooked on the story. Maybe try starting with something to get the audience intrigued or invested in the characters and/or plot first, and then go into the setting.
Most importantly, the "gyspy" thing is weird, that word is sometimes considered a slur. If it's not your culture, it's good form to research the culture you're writing about and aim for a sensitive portrayal.